Blood

In Blood we learn about Scarlett, a troubled youth who attempted suicide. She describes what it is like in a mental facility, and we learn about her home life. Her dad seemed to be the good parent and her mother had many problems (e.g. OCD, Narcissistic personality disorder, maybe more). We also learn that her father died a terrible death, and that is what possibly caused Scarlett's mental breakdown, who doesn't think she tried to really kill herself.

You are very, very good at giving specific and unique details in your writing. I especially loved the bit about the paintings the patients make and how the wrong ones are given to unsuspecting relatives. Very nice and dark. The thing about the green eyes was also really unique and great. I also thought the distinction between death and dying was immensely interesting (and I wished you played that up more).

While you have really great details and very interesting things to show, and a great voice here (did I mention that?), almost all of this story is summary. Nothing is really happening. We are just learning about things in Scarlett's life. We are told about the facility, her mom, her dad, the first time she saw blood, but none of this is really creating any tension or desire for the character. Because of that, your story reads as only an account of moments. I think the best way to fix this is to take away the flash backs and make it in chronological order. Then you can still see the effect the events of the story have on her, and still create some tension. It would have us guessing what she is going to do.