Way to tap into something that I fully relate to. Damn. Good job.
At first I thought you had killed the mother! But I'm happy that you didn't and just showed how important this routine was for the narrator.
Comparing the eyelids to raindrops on a window really set the tone.
I have one question though. What were you trying to do stylistically? The normal paragraph followed by one sentence paragraphs? To me it almost gave me a sense of hypnotism. The hypnotist says a few things and "You are getting sleepy." Says a few more, then "You are getting even more sleepy." I liked it.
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