"Safe"

Safe is about a woman who grew up in an environment that feared men. Her mother put that fear in her whenever she was little and now she fears them as an adult. The story details one night when a man breaks into her home and tries to rape her. The cops get to him before anything bad happens and we learn that the man was her father.

I really like the little details you bring to the character that emphasize her frightened state. Watching Criminal Minds for instance. That's exactly what scared people do. They just further fuel their fears. I also think instead of keeping the TV on to wait, she should keep it on because the noise makes her feel safer. (That's how I work anyway.) I also really liked the detail that she closed all of the doors when she was checking out the noise. I remember doing stuff like that when I was little. 

Calling a dog named Twinkie a protector is very funny by the way.

The biggest problem here is that I don't think there is a change. The story doesn't seem finished. The narrator starts scared of men and we assume she's even more scared now. The father doesn't change either. We are told he is a bad man and we learn that he's a monster. There's not enough character progression.

I suggest that you start the story with the incident with the father and then go from there. She would probably be a little traumatized by that incident and talk to no male at all. Even her brother. Then you can see a change in her that goes from fear and paranoia to cautious and slightly trusting or something. I just think we need to see her trusting of some male figure at some point.