"Chase" is a story about Caroline (who was supposedly "the good one") turning into nothing but "all shadow" due to her relationship with her boyfriend, Chase.
For the most part, the relationship between Chase and Caroline is pretty convincing. All of the observations in the tatto parlor greatly emphasize their relationship without actually spelling it out. How he looks at smut instead of holding her hand. How he insists that the tattoo she gets (that he decides on as a present) needs to be on her ribs (holy crap). All of that stuff was really, really well done. And you do a good job making sure that the effect their relationship had on Caroline is not only Chase's fault. (Caroline is really stupid, for one. Okay, not stupid, but superficial.)
I also really got a kick of the zombie parallel and the names Caroline gives the other characters. The humor works really well here.
I do think the Caroline's behavior at the end is a little over dramatic. I don't think she needs to have some emotional outburst. The last lines will have the same impact even without the outburst, I feel.
Also, maybe we can get just one positive thing about Chase that will let us know why Caroline was in the relationship for over a year. Or something like that.
Otherwise, really well done!
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